Favour wording- honest opinions please xx

Putting (no offence) is the equivalent of staring a sentence with 'I'm not being funny but...'

You've just repeated your insult. I am sure that if you thought about it you would see that the OP's poem and, for example, "O Mistress mine, where are you roaming,O stay and hear, your true love's coming" (Shakespeare) you would know there was difference in quality.

And also, a larger majority of poems have an ABAB rhyming structure.

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But surely poetry is a subjective thing? AC may well not like poetry that has rhyming couplets. I don't like white wine. Just because that white wine may be award winning and loved by critics, I would always pass it over for a good Shiraz.

I like Shakespeare's rhyming couplets.....

I'm confused as to how that is an insult. It's not like I called you fat. I'm also curious as to why it's alright for you to be insulting to the OP about not even bothering to read it. If you couldn't be bothered then don't post. The question and intention of the thread was about the wording/structure of the poem. If you can't be supportive and provide constructive criticism then why post at all?

I'm 99.9% sure that the OP is aware that the poem isn't exactly Shakespeare but that doesn't mean it's not a nice piece of writing.

How dare you?!

How dare I what?

This, twice. Back off Morwin. AC makes perfectly valid points and has been doing so in her YEARS of posting.

Twice what? I am so lost.

I cannot fathom how it's alright to insult the OP but not expect any backlash. Furthermore what has years of posting got to do with the price of eggs and what were the valid comments about? There certainly weren't any regarding OPs poem besides not using it.

You think I'm fat now???

The OP asked for opinions. I gave mine and suggested what I thought was better alternative. At which point did I insult the OP?

You have declared that I know nothing about poetry and are now getting downright unpleasantly personal.

I gave my opinion on the poem, you have a different opinion. That's what happens on an open forum and why people post queries.

Be so rude to ac. Troll off somewhere else. The op has already said she found nothing offensive in what ac wrote so quite why you feel the need to bandy around insults to a long standing member of the community is beyond me.

The valid comments - an alternative message of simplicity and meaning, agreed with by other posters. Entirely up the OP as to whether or not she decides to follow all or any of the advice on here.

I was agreeing with Mini. How dare you be rude to AC? She was trying to help. The OP asked for honest opinions and she got them. You come on here after five minutes giving out insults. Terrible behaviour.

No, I never called you fat. That would have been an insult. That's what I meant.

I'm not sure how questioning someones knowledge on poetry is an insult. It'd be like someone telling me I know nothing about geography or something. It's not an insult. Not in my eyes anyway.

Like I said, I apologise for my comment but that was the impression I got.

Jesus Christ, some of you are a bit touchy aren't you? I'm not actually talking about AC now, who the dispute was actually with, but thanks for sticking your noses in guys and trying to amplify the dispute "drama queen" is quite accurate isn't it?!

I have re read the thread again and still fail to see where you have insulted anyone.

Mum wants a Hat has received exactly what she asked for and I am 99.9% sure that she has taken all responses and will decide what to do herself.

I can't understand why you are taking someone else's opinion and arguing against it when it has nothing to do with the original post.

Classy. Turn up on a forum and try and dish out insults to long standing members . Sadly for you the term drama queen was used in an ironic way, if you had been here more than 30 seconds you would know that.

Like I said, troll off and plan your wedding elsewhere love.

Fine. Do question my knowledge of poetry. I am sure we can have amost enlightening discussion.

and point B... please do not blaspheme. That really is insulting and beyond the pale.

*Takes nose out and runs off to polish drama queen crown*

For what its worth not a fan of poems either sometimes less is more and the simple alternative already suggested by AC hits the nail on the head for me.......That said each to their own 'innit'?.

Also ? Kharv! only you could make a comparison of poetry and wine.

I really like this, simple and effective.

Hilarious. Not intentionally, of course. But MN can hardly know that AC comes from an immensely distinguished literary pedigree and can leave us all behind in her analysis and appreciation of the written word. Even English teachers.

Helenia, I agree. AC, I agree. MWAH - ha! What a great name acronym - I'm OK with cutesy couplets ('Romeo and Juliet, they never felt this way, I bet' is genius) but I think you lose some of the weight of the sentiment.

Right, here goes....

Firstly, thank you all for your critiques -I have read each post, some interesting have agreed with and acted upon, some interesting have simply accepted as genuine opinions and therefore welcome as much as all the others. I have not been insulted by any critique.

AC (I think it was your suggestion) , Thankyou- I will include the simply worded tribute on the back of the poem cards, rather than choosing one or the other. It is a lovely idea and I agree it gets the message across succinctly, but MILs children all like the poem so rather thanchoising one over the other, ill go for both. :0)

NOW THE CRUX OF THIS REPLY:

As I have said, I take critiques on the chin and do not easily take offence at anything. HOWEVER!!!! I DO take great offence that what was originally a post paying tribute to a loved one on what is usually a fair and honest forum has turned into an out and out war of words where insults seem to be acceptably thrown around. I had hoped that a little more respect be shown towards fellow posters and have unfortunately been left utterly disappointed by where this has led.

All I ask is that anyone responding to any comment consider their turn of phrase so we can keep this great forum a happy and civilised one.

Here endeth the sermon.....

Apologies for the confusing wording now I have read my previous comment- I badly cracked the screen on my pad this morning and didn't notice predictions playing their merry games :0o

Well said MWAH (love that since footlong pointed it out)

On a side note, boo about cracking your screen

P.S Did you still want any of those signs? I haven't had an e-mail from you!

Great idea MWAH (we are using it now!) to do both, and think the most important is that your late mother in law's children love it.

Now about a flashy planning thread?

Oo yes please!! Hadca busy few days so forgot, sorry. If you haven't heard from me in a couple of days, give me a shove plz... I do tend to be a bit forgetful if it's not on a list ;0) xx

I may just honour your request madam :0) tomorrow though- got the usual Sundays evening routine to get through first xx